写出英语作文得分的“亮点”

1。 改变句子的开头方式，不是一味地都是主语开头，接着是谓语、宾语，最后再加一个状语。可以把状语置于句首，或用分词作状语等。试比较:

(原文) My brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle the other day。

(修正) The other day my brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle。

(原文) The young man couldn’t help crying when he heard the bad news。

(修正) Hearing the bad news， the young man couldn’t help crying。

2。 在整篇文章中，避免只使用一两个句式，要灵活运用诸如强调句、主从复合句、分词短语、倒装句、省略句等。例如:

(1)强调句

(原文) The dog has saved my little sister bravely。

(修正) It is the dog that has saved my little sister bravely。

(2)主从复合句

(原文) We had to stand there to catch the offender。

(修正) What we had to do was to stand there， trying to catch the offender。

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(3)分词短语、由with或without引导的短语

(原文) The driver escaped and didn’t stop， he left the old man lying on the road。

(修正) The driver escaped without stopping， leaving the old man lying on the road。

(4)倒装句

(原文) I went to bed at 11:30。

(修正) Not until 11:30 did I go to bed。

(5)省略句

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(原文) While you are crossing the street， you should be careful。

(修正) While crossing the street， you should be careful。